Wednesday, December 22, 2010

Burn

You stand there
Watching me burn,
Body Shaking
Breaking
Cracking.
The flame burning through
A flame ignited by you,
And the body cracks
With the truth
Shattering into dust
From your lust
Stuck in your curse
To blend with the earth
To seed and re-birth.

9 comments:

  1. and the burning is consumptive
    taking away no warmth

    very well done
    thanks for sharing with One Shot

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  2. the stuck in your curse line struck me...the tone was already leaning but that pushed it over the edge...rebirth, rebirth...

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  3. "Stuck in your curse
    To blend with the earth
    To seed and re-birth."

    Striking poem with a strong ending - the lust, it is an unending cycle. It may break us, or it might be sated for a time, but always it returns...

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  4. ...A flame ignited by you,
    And the body cracks
    With the truth
    Shattering into dust
    From your lust
    Stuck in your curse
    To blend with the earth
    To seed and re-birth
    ...

    ...gripping visual...definitely an enjoyable read.

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  5. a great read...some powerful stuff here...thanks for sharing...all the best pete

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  6. powerful stuff. like the ending in particular

    regards

    Luke @ WordSalad

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